I really enjoyed the structure feedback, it's more your horror about it that is hilarious. Kame would leave this long involved feedback referring to how thankful he is to his family and friends and using metaphors about nature and life, leaving me completely unsure as to his actual feelings about the fic.

I KNOW. I WOULD SHIP THAT SORT OF PAIRING SO HARD TOO. IT WOULD BE A DELIGHTFUL SURPRISE.